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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In modern times, reliance on the internet and social media has significantly increased.
As a result
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, many people are replacing traditional meetings and gatherings with online
communication
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 rather than face-to-face interaction.
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 there are some drawbacks to
this
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 trend,
this
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 essay will discuss why I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. One of the primary benefits of using social media is the convenience and time efficiency it offers. Individuals can easily make a video call or send a quick message
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 of spending hours preparing and travelling to meet someone in person.
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, when students are preparing for exams or completing assignments, it is far more practical to make a ten-minute video call to exchange ideas than to spend two hours getting ready and reaching their destination.
On the other hand
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, excessive reliance on online
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 can lead to social isolation and a decline in interpersonal skills. Many young people now lack the confidence and experience to interact effectively in professional environments.
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, during the COVID-19 pandemic, students conducted almost all their academic activities online, including lectures, meetings, and consultations.
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, when they entered the workforce, many struggled with in-person
communication
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 and teamwork. In conclusion,
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 replacing face-to-face interaction with online
communication
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 may have some negative consequences, the benefits in terms of time efficiency and accessibility are more significant. With the rapid advancement of technology, virtual
communication
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 has become a dominant part of daily life, and people should adapt to it
while
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 maintaining opportunities for real-world social interaction.

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task response
State the view on the topic in the first line so the reader knows your stand.
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Give a strong point for each idea and back it with a real example that is easy to see.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also to help flow.
coherence
Use a new paragraph for each big idea and start it with a clear topic line.
structure
Provide more detail so you show you can discuss both sides well.
language
Use short, easy words and simple sentences so the meaning is clear.
examples
Explain each example so the point is shown.
strength
Clear view of the topic is shown in the end.
strength
Good use of at least one real example.
style
Easy to read and follow with simple links.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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