In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes. What are the causes? How should these young criminals to be punished?

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With the development of today's world, because many reasons affect,
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and adolescents prone to be more violent. The following article will discuss some of the reasons for
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and how to handle them properly.
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of all, the beginning of violence and society vice's that directly affect
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is probably due to the movies, social networks, and games they are playing or using. Some of these things will contain images that are not suitable for
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as smoking, stabbing each other, shooting guns, cursing, etc. When watching these things too often or too much, they will think it is obviously to be done and recreate it exactly like in the movies or games they play. Unfortunately, there are so many violent movies and games these days that we can't control what
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watch.
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, friendship will
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affect
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a lot, especially with adolescents. If they hang out with
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who are smart and studious, that's fine, but if they hang out with
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who are violent, mean, and want to drop out of school, it's even worse. These bad friends will entice the child with their
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and convince the
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that the
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is normal and will be better than school. There are so many temptations that solutions should
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be given in a reasonable way so that the
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and adolescents after being punished can have more correct thoughts. The
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thing is not to hit them or yell at them, that only makes things worse,
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of that, we should explain to them that these
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are not good and keep them away from the influences which affected
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them badly
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.
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show them positive
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and be the
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model for them, encouraging them so they can change
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their attitude
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. If they still can't change, the best thing for them is juvenile detention. There they will understand many values of life and will be forced to change their
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if they want to leave jail. In conclusion, we can't keep
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from being exposed to criminal
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because they are so numerous and uncontrollable, so the only thing we can try to do is perhaps limit our exposure to them as much as possible and have timely actions to prevent the child if the child commits a crime
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