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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In business, their
items
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 are advertised, standing out as being new today. Even though consumers can be attracted to them, I concern they can be
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exaggerated
advertisement
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advertisements
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.
Companies
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 advertise their
products
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 to sell
further
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 to
customers
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, promoting their new
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are
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that are
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 differentiated from others. Creative advertising
affect
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people
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 to consume them. If these goods are authentically innovative and necessary to
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, not only can the advertisement be effective, but
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companies
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 positively compete to create new
products
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. These competitions make
people
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 find the better quality of
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 and commercial business economically develop more.
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, these
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 can be positive in many ways.
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, businesses can exaggerate that their
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 are new through
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. They only focus on making innovative
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, not
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. It is not
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 good for
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 to release exaggerated
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 since
customers
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 no longer buy them, being disappointed
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 them. In spite of it, many
companies
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 choose an easy way how to advertise
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low quality
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items
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 to sell more to
people
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 as it can be effective in
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the short-term
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short-term
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short term
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 as well as they do not have to tackle to invent creative
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.
As
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 these cases, if
companies
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 advertise their
products
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 exaggeratedly, it can lead to negative commercial development. For these reasons, as
people
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 are attracted to and consume new
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 through their
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, I believe businesses should advertise innovative
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 authentically
corresponded
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 to
advertisements
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 for
customers
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, cautioning themselves against making an exaggeration.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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