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Euthanasia, or mercy killing, has been in the news more and more recently. Many people are strongly against such a practice, but there is a growing demand to have it legalized. How far do you agree with euthanasia being legal?

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The diagram indicates the differences in doing house chores include cooking, cleaning, pet care and washing in
men
 and
women
 in the UK Overall the vast majority of females do most of the household tasks ,especially in the cooking and baking field. On the other ,hand most of the
men
 prefer to take responsibility for the pets or maintenance odd jobs and about noun of them are participating in clothes washing and ironing.
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 less than 60% of
women
 are cleaning the house compared to
men
 who have less than 20% of them engaged in tidying. In fostering the children category
men
 take part about 20% but most of the work is on the
women
 shoulders approximately 50% of them
also
 it is the same process in ironing and washing the clothes field females have 30% of it.
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, the chart shows a different approach in doing odd jobs and gardening and pet care categories,
men
 show more interest about 30% than
women
 in pet caring and in maintenance
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 10% of
women
 participate and for males is less than 30%.
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