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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the modern era in which we live there are a lot of facilities and
choices
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 that provide us in many aspects. Some
people
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 claim that these days
people
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 have too many
choices
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 which make them confused. I believe it has advantages and disadvantages. In
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 case, it could improve our personal independence and satisfaction or lead to making wrong decisions due to a variety of never-ending
choices
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. In the old days, when
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 had lived more ordinary than today, there were few categories to choose
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 But now thanks to technology and progressing
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people
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 have extensive options to put and select the best as they wish.
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 important issue is that they usually had to continue their father’s job to livelihood or even were prohibited to study because of the compulsion of
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 so many of them did not satisfy and felt unhappy. Nowadays
people
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 have so many
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 to select and they live in a way they want without any forces. So, they can determine their own destiny leading the euphoria.
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, too many categories contribute to
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's dizziness. Sometimes, a variety of
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 can lead them to the inability to choose
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 the right
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. In many cases,
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 wrong choice results in hard trouble.
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, some young
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 think which they should try several and different types of jobs in order to find their suitable
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 but it might take years and waste their
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 without any conclusion.
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 another problem is, there are many advertisements which would trick
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 due to their own financial gain. Every year many of them try to absorb customers with unrealistic benefits and lead to a lot of damage. In conclusion, there are for and against these too many
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 and it has merits and drawbacks like keeping individual independence that could contribute
people
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’s satisfaction what they want in their lives or it could make them confused and would lead them to make the wrong choice and change their
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 path in a way they never deserve.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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