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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
In the modern era in which we live there are a lot of facilities and
choices
 that provide us in many aspects. Some
people
 claim that these days
people
 have too many
choices
 which make them confused. I believe it has advantages and disadvantages. In
this
 case, it could improve our personal independence and satisfaction or lead to making wrong decisions due to a variety of never-ending
choices
. In the old days, when
people
 had lived more ordinary than today, there were few categories to choose
.
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 But now thanks to technology and progressing
life
people
 have extensive options to put and select the best as they wish.
One
 important issue is that they usually had to continue their father’s job to livelihood or even were prohibited to study because of the compulsion of
life
 so many of them did not satisfy and felt unhappy. Nowadays
people
 have so many
choices
 to select and they live in a way they want without any forces. So, they can determine their own destiny leading the euphoria.
On the other hand
, too many categories contribute to
people
's dizziness. Sometimes, a variety of
choices
 can lead them to the inability to choose
in particular
 the right
one
. In many cases,
this
 wrong choice results in hard trouble.
For instance
, some young
people
 think which they should try several and different types of jobs in order to find their suitable
one
finally
 but it might take years and waste their
life
 without any conclusion.
One
 another problem is, there are many advertisements which would trick
people
 due to their own financial gain. Every year many of them try to absorb customers with unrealistic benefits and lead to a lot of damage. In conclusion, there are for and against these too many
choices
 and it has merits and drawbacks like keeping individual independence that could contribute
people
’s satisfaction what they want in their lives or it could make them confused and would lead them to make the wrong choice and change their
life
 path in a way they never deserve.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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