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Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animal species, for example the tiger or the blue whale. To what extent do you agree and disagree with this statement

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The importance of , which was always debatable, has now become more controversial. The substantial influence of trying to save endangered
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 has sparked
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controversy over the potential impact of
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 that trying to preserve
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 from danger is a waste, but it has some drawbacks as well.
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 and negative impacts of
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 will lead to a logical conclusion. At the outset, there are numerous ways to explain why saving endanger
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 is waste, but the most prevalent one is rooted in the fact that many
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 in the world now has been in extinction zone, which now more and more people strive to extend the fund for
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. As an illustration, research in
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these animal
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 and try to save them, out of the zoo but save in their jungles.
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, it is apparent that jungles have been largely destroyed
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a couple of years ago, so how can these
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 live in their home.
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, opponents of
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 trend tend to believe that in some cases preserve
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 from distinction is necessary.
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, according to new research from Harvard University, many
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 from the distinction zone have now been rescued and kept in the preservation areas, their circle of life could still be saved.
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, it is obviously true that saving endangered
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 is
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 thing we need to deal
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 thinking about the wealth. In view of
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 outlined above, one can conclude that
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 of
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 from danger is a waste is prominent,
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 it has a number of drawbacks that should be well handled.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • intrinsic value
  • existential threat
  • ecosystem
  • conservation
  • economic benefits
  • funding allocation
  • competing needs
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