Recent reserch suggests that the majority of criminals who are sent to prison commit crimes after they are released. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve this problem?

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There is a tendency that

criminals

to continue breaking laws after being in

jails

. Some researches convey that a person does not change their mind even if they spend time in

jails

. I truly believe that the reason for

that is

the interaction with other

criminals

. I will give a reasonable solution for that in

this

essay.

First

of all,

criminals

make the same-minded friends at the

jails

.After committing a murder the criminal is sent to the prison where hundreds of

criminals

are sitting.

Consequently

, those people became friends.

Moreover

, they became stronger together,

as a result

, they start to plan the future murders ,robberies and so on.

Hence

, the more

criminals

are in one place, the more the number of

crimes

after getting free from jail.

Second

of all, I believe that the best solution is educating

criminals

jails

. The educated person is able to deeply think about the consequences of a committed crime.

For example

, if a person was sent to jail because of racial backlash, he or she can be urged to read books about respecting others, having equal rights for everyone,

then

to write assignments on these books.

Therefore

, it will be open minding for those who commit

crimes

Thus

,education in

jails

will change the way of thinking of

criminals

which would lead to declining of

crimes

committed by already punished. To sum up, I strongly believe that

crimes

did after punishment thanks to the communication to all the prisoners.

Nevertheless

, in my opinion, educating those who were punished would reduce the number of

crimes

after being released

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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