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Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on boht individual and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #sites #impact #boht #society
Social networking sites h
as
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been a controversial issue for years. While some
people
 believe that they can't live without s
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smartphone
matphone
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a smatphone
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or computer, others claim it can r
esults
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in many bad consequences. In my opinion, despite the potential risks they pose, they have many potential effects i
n
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on
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both individuals and
society
. On the one hand, I would agree that social media seems to take a heavy toll on shaping a healthy
society
. A case in point is that many celebrities are facing with variety of threatening or hurtful messages. Like Taylor Swift in 2014, the h
astag
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hashtag
"#TSisoverparty" was on top trending for a long time just after Kim K
adashian
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Kardashian
posted a video on I
nstargram,
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Instagram
 for the purpose of m
islead
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misleading
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t
he
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apply
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society
 that Taylor's personality was like "a snake". Once becoming the target of c
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cyberbullying
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yber bullying,
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cyberbullying
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 those victims will suffer from depression, anxiety or suicide.
Therefore
, all of t
here
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their
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works and studies can be destroyed in the blink of an eye,
also
 due to the lack of regulations and s
tricted
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strict
stricter
laws about Internet s
ercurities.
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securities
On the other hand
, social media sites can f
ullfill
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fulfil
human's
life
 with a positive feeling. Since it is extremely easy to get access to the internet,
people
 can be provided huge o
ppotunities
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opportunities
in taking form about the world just by a click, regardless of their location, cultural backgrounds and ages.
For instance
, Facebook has now become one of the best communication tools, with billions of u
ser
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users
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from every walks of
life
.
People
 have a chance to search for friends, interact with their acquaintances or even a complete s
tranger.
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strangers
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 Through sharing k
nowledges,
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 experiences, stories about culture a
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and
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n
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and
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l
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lifestyles
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ife styles,
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lifestyles
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 each i
ndividuals
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can broaden his horizons and enlarge social relationships.
This
 can not only make a great impact on reducing stresses, help
people
 to relax after a hard-working day but
also
 gives them m
otivation
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to contribute to a well-being
society
. In c
onclution,
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conclusion
 it is true that social networking sites can d
oes
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harm to
people
 in some cases, but there are plenty of good benefits i
t
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they
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can b
rings
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bring
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to our
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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