In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days,
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spend their holidays in many ways. Some
people
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say that a lot of
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would like to travel their own country more than foreign countries on holiday. In my opinion, I disagree with
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opinion due to technological development and education reasons.
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, the development of transportation’s technology leads to saving
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’s time. Especially
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have largely developed
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as speed.
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, more and more
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can easily go to another country while saving their time.
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, 20 years ago, it took 3 hours to go to Korea from Japan by
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airplane
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, but today, it takes only 2 hours to go there because of invented new
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. It shows technology is developing every day.
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,
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will travel abroad as if they are going to your
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town.
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, for most
of
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people’s
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the people’s
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purpose of
traveling
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abroad is learning other countries' customs and traditions. Today’s society is becoming more
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.
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, significant
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want to learn other countries' customs and traditions to communicate and work with foreigners. In my case, when I had a foreign friend, it took so much time to understand each other, because we have different cultures. It is clear that to understand someone has
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culture, it is better to go and feel the different culture by yourself. In conclusion,in
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diversifying society, more and more
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will choose to go abroad on their holiday, not their own country due to
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technology and education reasons. I strongly believe
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travel abroad more in the future.
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