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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days,
people
 spend their holidays in many ways. Some
people
 say that a lot of
people
 would like to travel their own country more than foreign countries on holiday. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
 opinion due to technological development and education reasons.
Firstly
, the development of transportation’s technology leads to saving
people
’s time. Especially
airplanes
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 have largely developed
such
 as speed.
Therefore
, more and more
people
 can easily go to another country while saving their time.
For example
, 20 years ago, it took 3 hours to go to Korea from Japan by
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airplane
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, but today, it takes only 2 hours to go there because of invented new
airplanes
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. It shows technology is developing every day.
Thus
,
people
 will travel abroad as if they are going to your
next
 town.
Secondly
, for most
of
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people’s
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 purpose of
traveling
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 abroad is learning other countries' customs and traditions. Today’s society is becoming more
diversify
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.
Therefore
, significant
people
 want to learn other countries' customs and traditions to communicate and work with foreigners. In my case, when I had a foreign friend, it took so much time to understand each other, because we have different cultures. It is clear that to understand someone has
different
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 culture, it is better to go and feel the different culture by yourself. In conclusion,in
this
 diversifying society, more and more
people
 will choose to go abroad on their holiday, not their own country due to
development
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 technology and education reasons. I strongly believe
people
 travel abroad more in the future.
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