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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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These days, many
students
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 get the opportunity to study abroad compared to the past.
This
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 essay will discuss the pros and cons of studying in foreign countries. On the one hand, the
students
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 learn from different points of view while studying abroad. They may compare their own
country
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 from the
country
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 where they stay, and they would see any similar or different part.
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, in a class to talk about school education, the
students
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 will learn the good and bad points of both countries. Or while discussing a topic with other
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 from abroad, the
students
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 may share their opinions based on cultures.
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, it will help them expand their aspects.
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, staying away from the home
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 brings lots of difficulties
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 as living costs, a language barrier, culture shock, and more. As a student
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 alone from his family, he may face many challenges. When I was an exchange student in another
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, I got broken in my flat one night but I did not know how to deal with it.
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 the exchange
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 were more in danger than local
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, the police would not care much about the foreigners.
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, many young people tend to hide their problems from their families because they do not want to make their parents worried.
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 leads the young to loneliness and depression. To conclude, studying abroad can be a great experience but can be hard.
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, a student should be aware of its advantages and disadvantages to make the right decision.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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