Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school are more influential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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experiences have a huge impact on people's lives. While some believe that childhood experiences have more impact, others suggest that
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to
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in adolescence can bring about many changes. I truly believe that the latter's perspective makes more sense when the person is mature enough to explain what is happening to them and those around them
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On the one hand, it is believed that if minors are exposed to many situations in
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when they go to school. They will better understand their environment, lifestyle, people and
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to a certain extent. I fully support
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learning will guide them to address the challenges that may be encountered in the future.
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, when a person goes through a financial crisis, perhaps, he knows what went wrong in his plan leading to
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a tragic situation. In the end, he rarely made the same mistake in the future because he learned the lesson from his teenage years.
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, advocates of early-
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point out that when babies or toddlers encounter different situations, they become strong and prepare them to handle those problems effectively and smoothly.
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seems unrealistic to me because the children are not yet fully developed intellectually to understand the complex
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and its problems.
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, their
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is limited because they spend most of their time with their family.
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, bitter experiences can damage
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both mental and physical development and can have serious consequences.
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, people have different views on whether childhood living conditions or
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to adolescence may reflect their lives. In my view, learning that occurs during adolescence will seriously modify each person's
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • future life
  • experiences
  • childhood development
  • bonding
  • socialization
  • peer interactions
  • basic skills
  • education
  • learning
  • friendships
  • independence
  • identity
  • exposure
  • new ideas
  • perspectives
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