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Writing Samples
Band 6

Your next door neighbor owns a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night. Write a letter to your neighbor requesting that something be done about the dog. Include in your letter: oYour reason for writing oWhat you would like to happen oA nice, respectful style.

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Dear Mr. Singh, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I'm Rita, living next to your house, I am writing in the concern of disturbance we are facing because of
constant
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a constant
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dog
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 barking from your house. As you may know, my son Rahul's final B.ED exams are going on, So whenever he starts doing his study, he
lose
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 his concentration because of excessive noise which is created by your
dog
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. Not only
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,
dog
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 barking has disrupted our sleep patterns
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 which we're not able to wake up early in the morning. I know you're emotionally attached
with
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 your
dog
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 but
this
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 behaviour can affect your image in the neighbourhood.
Therefore
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, I suggest
you
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to
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whether you train your
dog
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 properly or take
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dog
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 to the training centres
whrere
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where
 dogs are trained well. Your consideration
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this
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 matter will be appreciated. I hope you will understand my concern and take
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action as soon as
posiible
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possible
. Regards, Amanjot Kaur.

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general
Proofread for minor grammatical errors, such as "you lose his concentration" which should be "he loses his concentration" and "posiible," which should be "possible."
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, rephrase sentences for a more fluid read. For example, instead of "I am writing in the concern of disturbance we are facing because of constant dog barking from your house," consider "I am writing to express my concern about the constant barking of your dog."
coherence cohesion
To make the letter more cohesive, you may want to add linking words or phrases, such as "Furthermore" or "Additionally," to separate points about the disturbances.
task achievement
The letter maintains a nice, respectful tone throughout, making it clear that you are concerned but still polite.
task achievement
The response effectively covers all aspects of the task prompt: stating the reason for writing, what action you would like taken, and maintaining a respectful style.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and well-executed, helping to frame the letter nicely.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • constant barking
  • daily routine
  • sleep disruption
  • training
  • veterinarian
  • bark control devices
  • pet ownership
  • compassionate
  • considerate
  • mutual solution
  • amicably
  • benefits both parties
  • with the best intentions
  • resolving the issue
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