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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

#people #parents #children #members #society #school #place
Nowdays
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, social
behaviour
 has become a
debateable
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debatable
 topic. Whether
,
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apply
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 one
school
 of thought reckons that societal norms should be taught to the juveniles by guardians. Whereas, other
thinks
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 that schools should teach
this
. The facts of the thesis will be demonstrated in the following paragraphs. One side of the argument
say
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 that to become a good society member
children
 should get knowledge from their parents because they are the
first
teachers
 of
pupil
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the pupil
a pupil
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.
Moreover
,
children
 are more connected with their family members and
also
 guardian is well known of their
kids
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kid's
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behaviour
. They
also
 know how they carry themselves as well as which whey is the best to teach them. To
examplify
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exemplify
, a kid
developes
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develops
 his senses by copying elders
therefore
 the impact of
behaviour
directly
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is directly
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 connected with the juvenile.
Other
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 side of argument reckons that schools should put a step forward to teach
children
 about social values. Not only
students
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do students
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 obey
teachers
 more than their family but
also
 they are in
discipline
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disciplined
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 whenever they are in
school
. So, it is very easy for
teachers
 to teach them.
Furthermore
, in some
researches
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 it is
also
 discovered that the students are more focused in
school
. Meanwhile, whatever they learn in
school
 will remain in their mind for
long
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 time. For an instance, a tutor teaches addition ( a term of mathematics) in primary
school
 but
this
 term remains in the brain for whole life. To sum up, the parents are the
first
teachers
although
 in my opinion schools are the best place to teach
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 about social
behaviour
 because
that is
 the place where they meet new people of different cultures. Most of the
children
 come
in
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to
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school
 with a learning
prespective
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perspective
 so, it is very convenient for
teachers
 to teach them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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