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Parents should control children behaviour but some says they shouldnot be controlled. Write both the viewes and give you opinion.

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Youngsters attitudes have had to be swayed by their
parents
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 for one reason or the other,
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, some people believe that that shouldn'
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 be the case.
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 essay believes that
children
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's behaviours should be checked and swayed by their
parents
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 but only when they do the wrong thing.
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 essay will discuss
firstly
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, why
parents
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 should
control
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 their
children
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, and
secondly
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 why they shouldn'
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control
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 their
children
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.
Parents
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control
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 their
children
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 for a number of reasons,
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, because the
child
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 is stubborn, while others
control
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 their
child
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 because they just want their
child
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 to behave as they would have. To shed more light on
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, while I was still living with my
parents
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 they never liked me playing out with other
kids
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 which I didn'
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 understand.
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 I saw as being controlling because there was no constructive reason for their action.
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, some believe that
parents
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 shouldn'
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control
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 their
kids
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 because they might never be independent as they would look for directions to do things.
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 is so because as they get older they will have no sense of direction, not being able to make decisions without being told what to do.
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, my
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 never allowed me to socialise with other
kids
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 while I was young and as I got older it was difficult to make friends.
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, I believe that there are situations that warrant
parents
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 to make tough decisions over their
kids
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. Situations
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 as, a
child
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 bullying other
kids
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, a
child
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 stealing, or a
child
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 being disrespectful to others. These scenarios are where
parents
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 need to come in and sway them.
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, the
kids
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 don'
t
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 do the wrong things anymore. So,
parents
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 can
control
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 their
kids
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 by swaying them carefully from doing the wrong things and not so much controlling them with force. In summary,
parents
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 can
control
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 their
kids
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 but only when the intent is right and not for reasons that serve their purpose.
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