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Men and women can never share the same responsibilities at home and in everyday life. Do you agree or disagree

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Traditionally, men and women had separate roles to play in life. Men were considered
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bread winners
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 and were expected to find a job and provide for their families while women were expected to be
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homemakers
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home makers
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. But does it have to be
this
 way, or can all
people
 engage in any activity they desire? In my view, the latter is more reasonable.
To begin
 with, we need to acknowledge the fact that, biologically speaking, there are clear distinctions between the sexes which could make one more suitable than the other for certain tasks.
For example
, men are generally thought to be more muscular and powerful while women are commonly considered to have
a
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higher emotional intelligence.
This
 could mean that manual
labor
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 should be a male responsibility and females should engage in more emotionally engaging tasks.
However
, recent studies suggest that
gender
 is a spectrum rather than black and white and the stereotypes do not apply to all. Considering
this
 revelation, we should not expect all
people
 to conform to the
gender
 roles propagated by
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society. In fact, in my opinion, rarely does the sex of a person determine what responsibilities they can shoulder.
People
, regardless of their
gender
, have certain characteristics and interests which makes them capable of completing certain tasks, be it mundane house chores
such
 as cooking, cleaning, and ironing, or more engaging activities
such
 as repairs and maintenance of the home appliances or raising a child. The same goes for any occupation; the
gender
 of an applicant should not colour the judgement of the employer since their capabilities are seldom dependent on that factor. In conclusion, while responsibilities used to be shared based on the
gender
 of individuals, I believe it no longer should be the case as
gender
 is not an adequate identifier of one's talents and abilities, and
people
 should be allowed to pursue their interests.
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