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you are having a party at your home to celebrate your birthday and you want to use a catering company to organize the food. You had some excellent food at a catered party last week at a friend's house.

#party #home #birthday #company #food #week #friend #house
Dear John, Hope you are doing fine.
Firstly
, I would like to thank you for inviting me to your birthday
party
although
 it sounds formal I really wanted to say it as I didn’t get a chance to at the
party
 as you were busy welcoming the guest. It was a spectacular and stress buster
party
 I would say for me. As I was completely into
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 mode for the past 6 months failed to socialize. I really admired the ambience, decoration and especially
food
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 the
party
. As you already know I will be turning 30
next
 week, I would like to through a
party
 inviting my colleagues and our college friends to it. So, I would like to know what the name of
catering
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 company is you hired to organize the food and how do I contact if you could provide the details I can get in touch with them for organizing one for my birthday.
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also
 would like to how much did it cost for you
hire
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 the catering company. I am planning to invite around 50 people almost the same number as your
party
. If you can give me the details it will be helpful. More
importantly
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 I expect your presence
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 the
party
 and give it a blast. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Lovingly Alan smith
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