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Some people believe that Technology such as mobile phones, cell phones are destroying social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

A highly controversial topic today relates to whether
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 are threatening human's connections. I strongly disagree that these innovations are a threat to our communication.
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, because can use it for educational's purposes as well as for connecting with other's nations. The main reason why I believe that technological object
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mobile phone is not a serious threat to our social life is that we can use
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 technology for learning.
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, these days many
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's developers build more than hundreds of
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 for learning. Where people can download that
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 and learn anything with one click.
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, most English learners have been using
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app
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 effectively to improve their level of English.
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, universities started to consider mobile
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 as an important tool for education.
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, during the COVID-19 ,pandemic most of the educational establishments used PCs and mobile
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 during distance learning. Another reason why I think that cell
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 are not destroying human's connection is that can connect with everyone around the world with one click.
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, the world became a small village where it becomes too easy to connect with someone in Africa, Asia, and Europe.
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, in the past people spent a massive amount of money to send a message to a friend or even a relative;
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, sometimes your message might not arrive at the final destination.
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, nowadays most CEO's could attend any meeting with their cell
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.
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, politically speaking, there was a riot in Turkey; Prime Minister Mr Erdugan used his phone to communicate with the media and send his messages to the citizens and because of that he regain
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 the country. In conclusion, I completely admit that innovation; namely, mobile and cell
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 are not a danger to human interconnectedness
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 is because we can use them for education and to attend meetings and to send any urgent message.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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