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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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The ecosystem has been detrimental to human beings in many ways.
Air
pollution
 and
deforestation
 are the most harmful environmental problems that mankind is facing today.
This
 essay will mainly address those issues about what the governments and individuals can do on each problem.
Firstly
, there is no doubt that
air
pollution
 has a tremendous impact on global warming which is caused by the excessive carbon footprint of vehicles.
For instance
, many respiratory-related health conditions
such
 as asthma, pneumonia can be experienced by long-term inhaling the polluted
air
.
Secondly
, some human behaviours like illegal logging can lead to
deforestation
 which can be very harmful to the greenhouse effect. In consequence, many species are losing their habitat and many
people
 are facing annual floods due to losing tree barriers in the way of rainwater flow. The one solution to address the
air
pollution
 problem is to increase taxes on imported
cars
 by governments. To be precise, increasing import taxes can bring down the number of private
cars
 running on the roads so that many
people
 are taking into account public transports. One possible way to prevent
deforestation
 is to pass laws to ensure there is no illegal tree cutting.
In other words
, the local authorities must ensure that the green preservation is under protection.
On the other hand
, everyone has a responsibility to reduce the amount of carbon emission that can damage the ecosystem by decreasing unnecessary use of private
cars
 ,
for example
, by using railways, buses or carpooling.
Moreover
,
people
 can stop
deforestation
 by informing suspicious logging companies and participating in reforestation In conclusion, environmental issues
such
 as
air
pollution
 and
deforestation
 can be prevented by cooperation between governments and citizens. The law about taxes and logging can help to reduce the impact and
people
 can lessen their use of private
cars
 and report potential tree cutting.
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