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Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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It is increasingly common for families to send their relatives to nursing
homes
 rather than take
care
 of them at home.
This
 essay will discuss both the benefits and drawbacks that have resulted from
this
 switch.
To begin
 with the positives, one significant advantage is that
care
homes
 are often equipped with better facilities and tools to accommodate the needs of the elderly.
For example
, nursing
homes
 do not usually have stairs, but for those which do, elevators or lifts can be installed.
Therefore
, the mobility problems which tend to appear among elderly people might not be worsened.
Furthermore
, staff working in
care
homes
 is usually professionally trained and capable of handling the demands of nursing home residents.
Conversely
, it is rare to find family members who possess these skills.
Nevertheless
,
this
 switch does present some problems, the most obvious of which is a lack of loved ones around. The reason for
this
 is that
although
 friends and family relatives are allowed to visit residents of
care
homes
, these visits can be on an occasional basis,
thus
 making these residents feel lonely.
This
 can
also
 result in a greater risk of depression and having their immune systems weakened.
In addition
, elderly people in
care
homes
 tend to be surrounded by illness and death, which in turn decreases the level of happiness and triggers depression as a consequence. In conclusion, despite the benefits of well-equipped facilities and well-trained professionals that nursing
homes
 can offer, it is important to consider the consequences of loneliness, lower happiness, and triggering depression that the elderly might experience.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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