Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. DO the advanatges of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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at primary school rather than
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school because
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in foreign companies because they
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and working other countries but they
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build the company in my
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government should important mother tange
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in all schools because as well as
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