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Large shopping malls are replacing small shops. Do you think it is positive or negative development?

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During the
last
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 decade, replacing of small shopping malls is one of the most important problems associated with big
shops
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. Personally, I strongly believe that
this
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 situation will lead to positive consequences. In the following paragraph, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined in detail with prominent examples.
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 of all, people get more choice of
products
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 at the huge supermarkets. There are various options
of
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for
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 the goods compared to the local
shops
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.
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, fruits, vegetables, craft
products
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, and dairy
products
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 to name but a few. Since the large department stores have a bigger space to show the
products
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.
The customers have more options to buy.
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, Abilities to select diverse stuff into the marketplaces
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also
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 considered as one of the main reasons for having a different choice to sell as well.
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, big supermarkets provide excellent customer service. Not only to provide a selected product, but they
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 offer buyers a high-quality service. The large malls are likely to present customers with the best experiences when they are in the
shops
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, all the employees are trained to serve quality services to clients. They prepare to answer and help buyers find some stuff.
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, the section of the reception is located near the entrance to let visitors ask for help if they needed. Guarantees and return policies can be found in some shopping malls. These are
an
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outstanding benefits of having big
shops
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 in town. To sum up, becoming a large marketplace instate of the small one is a positive movement. Since they provide multiple choices of selling and
also
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 a service-mind in their space as well.

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