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If a product is good and meet customer needs then people will buy it and advertising it unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#product #customer #people
Nowadays, a customer gets satisfaction with the material purchase,masses buy it for future and advertising it unwanted.I agree to some extent with the statement.
Further
 elaboration will get in the below paragraphs.
First
 and foremost, in cutting edge people gets excited in an early manner and they share the moments on social media .In the same ,way numerous human beings get joy when they purchase a product that completes their needs and set it on social media as an advertisement.
For instance
 ,Star bucks which is a coffee brand and have numerous branches all around the world they assumed that customers love their coffee taste and they post it on social news platform and they take it as an advertisement of the brand.Another reason could be showing off nature among the society
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because population when purchasing costly
items
 they immediately shared item related information with their nears and dears,which is
also
 median of advertisement. On the other ,hand sometimes individuals get a personal discount via shopkeepers on an item ,but they hesitate to share information about
such
items
.
Last
 but not least,
items
such
 as Gold,Silver,Diamonds ,community always avoid telling anyone to avoid crimes like snatching or robbery.
Therefore
 undoubtedly people avoid advertising whether they purchase
items
 that meet their needs. To recapitulate ,advertising of a purchased item done by the consumer is agreeable but to some extent.For some products
such
 as Gold and Silver,people are afraid to share information related to it but
items
 like coffee they like to advertise on social media or via talking to someone.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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