Living in big cities is bad for people's health. What extend do you agree and disagree?

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scenario, everyone has a dream to live in big

cities

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, it is sometimes thought

people

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have more

health

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issues to live in the metropolitan areas. In my opinion, I considered that living in big

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have both positives and

negetives

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negatives

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effects

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people

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health

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. There are several reasons why

people

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are getting more

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problems while they are living in urban areas. The

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and foremost important thing is that increasing pollution. There

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too much traffic congestion in

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the city

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beacuse

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use of personal vehicles.

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cities

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do not have more

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to keep air pollution

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control.

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, most of the trees are

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down to construct tall buildings.

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people

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can not get fresh air. Another point to consider living in

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is not good for human's

health

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means expanding industries. There are many factories in

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are

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emiting

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emitting

toxic gases from their chimneys.

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, in one survey has conducted in the Uk, toxic gases are terrible for human's

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and they can be prevented

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breath

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people

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may have

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because of breathing problems.

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people

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would have various detrimental diseases.

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people

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have many options to fit their

health

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when they are living in urban areas.

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, there are many

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available and

people

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go on

regular

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base

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over there.

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, some

people

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are doing morning

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and

exercies

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exercises

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to keep

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healthy.

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, they may have

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diet. In conclusion, the life expectancy

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less in

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people

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with

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numerous diseases, but there are some ways to live

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a healthy life and it should not neglect.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Living in big cities is bad for people's health. What extend do you agree and disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

disadvantages and advantages of universal healthcare.[781]

Nowadays, families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this. Why is this happening? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

in the future, the main reason for going to the shopping mall will be for entertainment not to Shop. Do you agree or disagree?

An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

Some people believe that using animals to test the safety of human medicines is cruel and unwarranted, whereas others feel it is a medical necessity. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.