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Discuss advantages and disadvantages of working from home?

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These days ,
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remote
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common
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employees
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Although
 I think that
this
 trend can have some obvious adverse consequences , I believe that the advantages of telecommuting can outweigh the disadvantages . On the one hand , it is argued that telecommuting can lead to
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 lack of motivation and the loss of interpersonal skills for workers.
In other words
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face-to-face interaction will be replaced by virtual
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 through Teams or skype and phone calls .
As a result
 , the
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employees
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in-person communication
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 is important for the development of interpersonal skills .
In addition
, the
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employees
 who
work
 from their residences may feel demotivated and less
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 to
work
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 especially for those who are in
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 .
For example
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 can have less
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motivation to
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 their children
instead
 of working.
On the other hand
 , it is considered that telecommuting is a positive trend for several reasons .
Firstly
,
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 can benefit from the convenience of working from their home , they can save their time and money
that is
 spent on commuting expenses or
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 transport public .
Secondly
 , the absence of the staff may help companies to save the internet and electricity bills and In conclusion ,
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