Some people think it is important spending a lot of money on family celebrations such as birthday and weddings while others think it is waste of money. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Human is

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social animal and is always looking for

ocassions

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to celebrate and to have social

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gatherings

. Birthday, weddings are the days that a person loves to spend with family and near dear

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's. People do not think twice before spending high amounts on these parties with close relatives. On the flip side, it is

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said that these costly gatherings are not

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and can be avoided. Let us discuss both

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views. In the current scenario, where people have been stuck in the four corners of their rooms, due to the pandemic. They want to get out and have fun with their small group of family members. And there is absolutely nothing wrong

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that. The

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spent here is actually earned by the individual himself and it is up to him or her how to spend it.

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tend to get some sort of competition in relations.

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, people who can not afford

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big parties, take it personally and try to show off that they can spend

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amount of

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too, which may take them under

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debt and unnecessary mental stress. Weddings in my country

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one

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day for which, parents save all the

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that they can over the years, only to spend it all in a day. There are cases where fathers to a daughter

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as they can not keep up

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the pressure of having a grand wedding

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. To conclude, I would say that, it is an individual's choice to spend the

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earned by him or her for the special days.

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, it is even more important to understand the

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's worth and the efforts that have gone into earning that and

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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306 words

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Some people think it is important spending a lot of money on family celebrations such as birthday and weddings while others think it is waste of money. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library’s manager, in your letter include: – A brief introduction of yourself – Your experience and relevant skills – Why you want the job