Some people think it is important spending a lot of money on family celebrations such as birthday and weddings while others think it is waste of money. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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social animal and is always looking for
ocassions
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occasions
to celebrate and to have social
getherings
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gatherings
. Birthday, weddings are the days that a person loves to spend with family and near dear
one
's. People do not think twice before spending high amounts on these parties with close relatives. On the flip side, it is
also
said that these costly gatherings are not
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and can be avoided. Let us discuss both
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views. In the current scenario, where people have been stuck in the four corners of their rooms, due to the pandemic. They want to get out and have fun with their small group of family members. And there is absolutely nothing wrong
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that. The
money
that is
spent here is actually earned by the individual himself and it is up to him or her how to spend it.
This
is
one
option that
one
has.
On the other hand
,
such
lavish
get togethers
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tend to get some sort of competition in relations.
Then
, people who can not afford
such
big parties, take it personally and try to show off that they can spend
equal
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amount of
money
too, which may take them under
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debt and unnecessary mental stress. Weddings in my country
,
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is
one
such
day for which, parents save all the
money
that they can over the years, only to spend it all in a day. There are cases where fathers to a daughter
committ
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suicides
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as they can not keep up
to
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the pressure of having a grand wedding
any more
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. To conclude, I would say that, it is an individual's choice to spend the
money
earned by him or her for the special days.
However
, it is even more important to understand the
money
's worth and the efforts that have gone into earning that and
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accordingly
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Significance
  • Essential
  • Essence
  • Investment
  • Nurture
  • Bond
  • Celebrate
  • Milestone
  • Achievement
  • Commemorate
  • Tradition
  • Criticism
  • Extravagant
  • Budget-friendly
  • Intimate
  • Alternatives
  • Pragmatic
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