In some countries, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In some countries, kids or teenagers are always told that they can achieve anything if they work hard enough. In
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I will explain both advantages and
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of giving
children
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thought. On the one hand, giving
children
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message
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a young age is good for them
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diffculties
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difficulties
which they may meet in the future. Because
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the problems or the failure. Keeping
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open mind to try new things or to try again and again is a good habit for offspirngs. Especially in today's
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society
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competition can be
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fierce
, giving
children
this
thought can encourage them to prepare for the challenges in the future.
On the other hand
, it
also
has some disadvantages of giving kids
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messages.
Firstly
,
children
may be
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vulnerable
when they find that some
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infants
facts
in facts
they can not change.
For example
, some
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are decided by gene, someone may
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at
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mathematics
while others are not. For
children
, they do not have enough ability to judge a thought is correct or incorrect. They may misunderstand
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message and when they can not
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achieve
the goal they may feel upset and frustrating and it is not good for
children
's growth.
Secondly
, it may reduce
children
's happiness in their childhood. Because as a child, having fun with friends is important. Some experts
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advised
that we should
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children
a
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friendly
enviroment
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environment
and let them grow up with no
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worries
. If they
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taught
with
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this
message, they may feel
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and become unhappy. In sum, education is a
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issue and worth
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more attention
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it. Only if
children
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a better environment.
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