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In some countries, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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In some countries, kids or teenagers are always told that they can achieve anything if they work hard enough. In
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 I will explain both advantages and
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 of giving
children
this
 thought. On the one hand, giving
children
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 message
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 a young age is good for them
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diffculties
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difficulties
 which they may meet in the future. Because
this
 means they will not be afraid
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 the problems or the failure. Keeping
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 open mind to try new things or to try again and again is a good habit for offspirngs. Especially in today's
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society
,
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competition can be
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fierce
, giving
children
this
 thought can encourage them to prepare for the challenges in the future.
On the other hand
, it
also
 has some disadvantages of giving kids
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 messages.
Firstly
,
children
 may be
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vulnerable
 when they find that some
infacts
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infants
facts
in facts
 they can not change.
For example
, some
talent
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 are decided by gene, someone may
good
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 at
mathmatics
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mathematics
 while others are not. For
children
, they do not have enough ability to judge a thought is correct or incorrect. They may misunderstand
this
 message and when they can not
achive
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achieve
 the goal they may feel upset and frustrating and it is not good for
children
's growth.
Secondly
, it may reduce
children
's happiness in their childhood. Because as a child, having fun with friends is important. Some experts
adviced
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advised
 that we should
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children
a
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friendly
enviroment
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environment
 and let them grow up with no
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worries
. If they
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 taught
with
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this
 message, they may feel
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 and become unhappy. In sum, education is a
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 issue and worth
to pay
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 more attention
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 it. Only if
children
 can grow up
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 a better environment.
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