Many people think that fast food companies should not be allowed to advertise while others believe that all companies should have the right to advertise. What is your opinion?

Fast
food
had
becoming
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more and more popular in today’s lifestyle of eating. Many
people
may think that advisement should be banned from fast
food
companies
to promote their
food
product whereas some do agree that it is all
companies
’ right to make their
advertisement
. In my personal opinion, I totally agree that all
companies
can have the
rights
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to advertise their
products
or services.
However
, rules and regulations should be implemented while allowing each
companies
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company
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to have their freedom in promoting respective
products
, in order to address the
society
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concerns, mainly on receiving wrong
information
, especially targeting
children
.
To begin
with, all
companies
including fast
food
companies
should have
their
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freedoms
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freedom
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to promote their
products
because all
companies
need sales to survive their businesses in
this
competitive era of
economy
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.
This
is not only applied to small
companies
or minor businesses but
also
to big and
well developed
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companies
. Big fast
food
company
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companies
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such
as MC Donald’s and Kentucky’s always come out with interesting and eye-catching advertising whenever new items came up. Despite having enough popularity among other fast
food
companies
, they still come out with new items to boost
people
’s interest
toward
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them.
This
is because they still need to maintain their market and sales in order to pay salaries to a huge number of workers.
However
, some
people
may think that these
companies
should not advertise too much due to certain concerns. It is undeniable that fast
food
gives
the
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society
an unhealthy image which is a fact itself.
This
is probably the main reason some
people
may find it uncomfortable when certain fast
food
companies
advertise their
food
items too much. I would think that the most worried group of
people
is the parents because their main concern is if
children
get too attracted to the
fast
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fast-food
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food
advertisement
, they may become addicted and it will become a problem to their health,
such
as obesity.
Therefore
,
although
fast
food
companies
can have the freedom to promote their
products
as other
companies
do, rules and
regulation
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regulations
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should be implemented to ensure that no misleading
information
is projected through their
advertisement
. Fast
food
companies
should be very cautious with the
information
presented via their
advertisement
,
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because it can directly impact
on
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to
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our
society
.
For instance
, if
children
nowadays
becoming
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more and more addicted to fast
food
, obesity in
children
will become a new healthcare burden. In conclusion, no
companies
should be banned from advertising
own
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their own
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products
or services because it is their
rights
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right
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.
Nevertheless
, all
companies
should hold their social responsibility by following rules and
regulation
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regulations
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while creating
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the advertisement
an advertisement
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advertisement
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advertisements
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to ensure no wrong
information
is passed on to
the
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society
and
people
.
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