Many people think that fast food companies should not be allowed to advertise while others believe that all companies should have the right to advertise. What is your opinion?
Fast
food
had becoming
more and more popular in today’s lifestyle of eating. Many Change the form of the verb
become
people
may think that advisement should be banned from fast food
companies
to promote their food
product whereas some do agree that it is all companies
’ right to make their advertisement
. In my personal opinion, I totally agree that all companies
can have the rights
to advertise their Fix the agreement mistake
right
products
or services. However
, rules and regulations should be implemented while allowing each companies
to have their freedom in promoting respective Change to a singular noun
company
products
, in order to address the society
concerns, mainly on receiving wrong Replace the word
social
information
, especially targeting children
.
To begin
with, all companies
including fast food
companies
should have their
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the
freedoms
to promote their Fix the agreement mistake
freedom
products
because all companies
need sales to survive their businesses in this
competitive era of economy
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the economy
This
is not only applied to small companies
or minor businesses but also
to big and well developed
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well-developed
companies
. Big fast food
company
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companies
such
as MC Donald’s and Kentucky’s always come out with interesting and eye-catching advertising whenever new items came up. Despite having enough popularity among other fast food
companies
, they still come out with new items to boost people
’s interest toward
them. Change preposition
in
This
is because they still need to maintain their market and sales in order to pay salaries to a huge number of workers. However
, some people
may think that these companies
should not advertise too much due to certain concerns.
It is undeniable that fast food
gives the
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apply
society
an unhealthy image which is a fact itself. This
is probably the main reason some people
may find it uncomfortable when certain fast food
companies
advertise their food
items too much. I would think that the most worried group of people
is the parents because their main concern is if children
get too attracted to the fast
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fast-food
food
advertisement
, they may become addicted and it will become a problem to their health, such
as obesity. Therefore
, although
fast food
companies
can have the freedom to promote their products
as other companies
do, rules and regulation
should be implemented to ensure that no misleading Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
information
is projected through their advertisement
. Fast food
companies
should be very cautious with the information
presented via their advertisement
,
because it can directly impact Remove the comma
apply
on
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apply
to
our Change preposition
apply
society
. For instance
, if children
nowadays becoming
more and more addicted to fast Wrong verb form
become
food
, obesity in children
will become a new healthcare burden.
In conclusion, no companies
should be banned from advertising own
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their own
products
or services because it is their rights
. Fix the agreement mistake
right
Nevertheless
, all companies
should hold their social responsibility by following rules and regulation
while creating Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
Add an article
the advertisement
an advertisement
advertisement
to ensure no wrong Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
information
is passed on to the
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apply
society
and people
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