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Aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good trend, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The graph reveals the number of bananas which sold in Japanese
France
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Germany
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 and the
USA
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 from 1996 to 2004. Overall, in 1996
Japan
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 and
France
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 sold the same total of bananas and
Germany
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 and the
USA
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 sold less than them. At the end of
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 period,
Japan
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 and
France
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 had the same sales while
Germany
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 sold just under them and the
USA
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 had the lowest sale. In 1996
Japan
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 and
France
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 sold about 2
kg
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.
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, the number of bananas in
Japan
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 rose reached to 3
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 as a peak in 1998 while
France
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 was remained stable until the same year. Both of these countries had a rapid fall in 1999. After
this
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 year there they fluctuated until 2003 which they became different minimally. While
Japan
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 had a rapid decline to 1.5
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France
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 levelled out at 2
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 to 2004.
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,
Japan
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's sales increase to 2
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 in the same year. At the beginning of
this
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 period,
Germany
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 sold approximately 1.5
kg
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 while the
USA
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 sold just under it in around 1
kg
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. In comparison to
Germany
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 which had picked a high of just over than 2.5
kg
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 the
USA
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, it's a had no change trend until 1998. After that
Germany
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 dipped a low of well over than one
kg
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 while the
USA
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 sold almost as much as past. In the other years of
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 period, both of them had a stable trend until the end which the
USA
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 sold a little more than one
kg
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 and
Germany
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 had around 1
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 banana's sales.
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