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Aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good trend, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The graph reveals the number of bananas which sold in Japanese
France
Germany
 and the
USA
 from 1996 to 2004. Overall, in 1996
Japan
 and
France
 sold the same total of bananas and
Germany
 and the
USA
 sold less than them. At the end of
this
 period,
Japan
 and
France
 had the same sales while
Germany
 sold just under them and the
USA
 had the lowest sale. In 1996
Japan
 and
France
 sold about 2
kg
.
However
, the number of bananas in
Japan
 rose reached to 3
kg
 as a peak in 1998 while
France
 was remained stable until the same year. Both of these countries had a rapid fall in 1999. After
this
 year there they fluctuated until 2003 which they became different minimally. While
Japan
 had a rapid decline to 1.5
kg
France
 levelled out at 2
kg
 to 2004.
Also
,
Japan
's sales increase to 2
kg
 in the same year. At the beginning of
this
 period,
Germany
 sold approximately 1.5
kg
 while the
USA
 sold just under it in around 1
kg
. In comparison to
Germany
 which had picked a high of just over than 2.5
kg
 the
USA
, it's a had no change trend until 1998. After that
Germany
 dipped a low of well over than one
kg
 while the
USA
 sold almost as much as past. In the other years of
this
 period, both of them had a stable trend until the end which the
USA
 sold a little more than one
kg
 and
Germany
 had around 1
kg
 banana's sales.
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