Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other while other think that people have become more independent.discuss both views and give your opinion.

Modernism has changed the world since the
last
decades and with-it societies have transformed.
Therefore
, people's interactions have become weaker, resulting in more independent persons. Along with these changes in relationship behaviour, technology has become stronger causing effects in modernity interrelations.
Firstly
, is important to mention that some decades before
families
around the world were bigger, making
this
connection between individuals stronger because
families
were more band together, sharing same interests, routines, place of living and jobs. Nowadays,
families
usually have fewer kids, and their housing belongs related to their jobs making
families
apart. According to a Harvard study, since 2000 it was demonstrated that
families
have many members living abroad or in a different city from their parents,
therefore
this
kind of distance develop people autonomy and independence.
Additionally
, is impossible to avoid that technological growth has parted societies, because
this
innovation allows connections with people all around the world, consuming the attention that at
first
was given to a local place and now it is focused globally, making individuals apart because of their interests.
Furthermore
, is investigated that technology advances had made communities spend less time interacting with their friends and
families
developing skills related to dependency and self-reliance.
On the other hand
, there are some populations that disagree with it and support that modernity has developed more dependency between persons, claiming that societies have become more globalized,
therefore
they are more linked between them at economic, political, and cultural issues. A clear example is the actual the performance of economy between countries, in the Colombian case we are dependent on China's economy. Making
this
country conditional on what happens on the other side of the earth affecting trading, markets and consumers.
Finally
, highlighting different points of view on the evolution of dependency in relations, I consider that ,definitely modernity has made society more independent than it was decades ago. Making
families
and groups apart, caused at
first
because of the technology innovations we have had.
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