Intelligence is the most important quality for a leader. Do you agree or disagree?

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that being smart is
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part of leadership .
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compassion , social intelligence and
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are more important qualities for a leader . On the one hand
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intelligence can help in most
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to lead . Since the individuals can solve
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of issues and tasks .
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when ordinary people have problems like math or political
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they can recognise
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trouble .
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lead . On the other
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social intelligence and
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a key role in leadership . A
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leader can find original
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problems and adapt quickly
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changing situations. Since, during
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, leaders who think fast and
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problems are more successful than those who think simply .
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individuals like Einshtain and Marlin Manro who have a number of works .
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creativity
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helps leaders to solve
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the team. In conclusion

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Task Achievement
Your introduction states your opinion clearly, but could be more engaging. Try to include a brief outline of your main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to connect your ideas better. Use linking words like 'however' or 'moreover' to show the relationship between your thoughts.
Task Achievement
Some sentences are unclear or contain mistakes. Make sure to proofread your writing to fix typos and grammatical errors.
Task Achievement
You have mentioned important qualities, but include more examples of well-known leaders to support your points better.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay presents a counterargument effectively by acknowledging intelligence as a quality for leadership before presenting your view, which shows critical thinking.
Task Achievement
You provide a strong focus on creativity and social intelligence, which are important aspects of leadership, demonstrating good topic understanding.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • informed decisions
  • complex problems
  • anticipate
  • emotional intelligence
  • connect with others
  • inspire
  • manage conflicts
  • wisdom
  • integrity
  • execute ideas
  • empathy
  • resilience
  • motivate
  • unite
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