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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both this attitudes and give your own opinion.

#people #places #visit #food #attitudes
There is no doubt that
people
mostly
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 divided into 2 groups: those who love adventures and home-based
people
. Those in
first
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 group keep a view of “the action is life”, and
critics
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 the way of thinking of their opponents. In
this
essay
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 I will look
both
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at both
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 sides of
this
 attitude and give my opinion. On the one hand, it is clear that habitual things in life are most safe, as you know the pros and cons of it.
This
 has given in
example
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 of purchasing the same groceries each weekend, from the same producer, because the trust on it gain its reputation. It is
therefore
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,
people
 afraid of being disappointed, or paying twice for
mistake
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 purchase.
By contrast
, a growing number of
people
 disagree and hold the view that
the
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life is multifaceted, where the meaning itself is to try something new, no matter new hobby or fresh style for cooking
turkey
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a turkey
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 on
the
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Thanksgiving
Day
.
For instance
, according to British scientists,
people
 who
travels
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 around the world are happier than
people
 who never went out of its borders.
Consequently
, exploring something new changes not
only
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mood
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 of
person
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a person
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, but
also
 the way of thinking. All things considered, while
benefits
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 of getting
new
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a new
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 experience
seems
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 obvious to one sort of
people
, some still feel that being safe is much important. Overall, it seems advisable that since the
day
 of born, newborns
always
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exploring
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 new things, and trials advancing
day
 by
day
, meaning that a person becoming more and more intellectual, so I am in the bunch of adventure nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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