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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

#it’s #time #ban #media #life #people #world #politics #self-image #spread #disinformation #experiment #goodbye
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As technology has developed, more and more
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 tend to be dependent on their devices. According to a survey, 80% of
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 over the world can not live without their phones and nearly 70% of
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 are spending above 4 hours per day on social
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. That incredible numbers represent real states of affairs with several problems to face. Social
media
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 drives
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 to bad situations, from politics to self-image, to the spread of disinformation, and even worst. “It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye”. I agree with
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 statement and the essay below will explain more details about my option. On the street, not hard for us to see a random person walking without observation but staring at their phone. In the coffee shop, many
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 only stare at their phones and miss out on their conversation, less face-to-face activities.
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 are being addicted to and obeyed social
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, they forget the real value of life, immerse themselves in fake social where they are not themselves any longer. What attract
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 so much? Harmful images, information is destroying a whole generation. Little kids are infected with violent videos, overage scenes, and bad thinking. By staying inside, the number of
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 causing dangerous illness
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 as obesity, disable, poor intellectual development,… Young
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 are running out of money due to the luxury race. They try to show themselves to
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 that they don’t even know on social
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, posting mistaken living standards through fancy check-in pictures.
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 addiction to social
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 needs to be banned right away. We could not let our future be ruined. If not, we have to figure out another solution to fix
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 situation.
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