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People think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion

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It is widely believed that one solution to environmental problems would be for governments to raise the price of petrol. While I consider that
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 might be an effective measure, I would argue that other measures might have an even greater impact. If national authorities raised taxes on petrol,
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 would address two environmental issues.
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, in terms of private cars, motorists would limit the number and length of their journeys to compensate for the extra expense. Governments would
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 be forced to upgrade and expand public
transport
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 provision, as people would still need to travel to work, to school or to travel to shops and hospitals,
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, from the perspective of freight services, more goods would have to be transported by rail rather than by truck. Both these measures would cut down on emissions from vehicles and help to reduce the greenhouse effect.
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, while
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 rise in fuel prices might be a useful stopgap measure, governments could adopt
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 policies
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 would be more effective in the long term. The local authorities in London,
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, introduced a congestion charge on all vehicles visiting the city centre. They use the money raised to subsidize the cost of fares and to invest in
transport
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 infrastructure. In turn,
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 has improved the air quality in the city,
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 of the reduction in exhaust fumes. Another policy would be to introduce free bus and train passes, as the increased use of public
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 would reduce pollution from private cars and help in the effort to combat global warming. In conclusion, a sharp rise in petrol prices would be a useful environmentally-friendly
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 measure,
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 in the longer term other steps would be more effective.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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