Many people go to university for acadamic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualifed workers such as electricians and plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It’s obvious that many

people

pursue the dream of entering

university

for academic studies. It can’t be denied that

university

graduates have a great chance of a good job in the future, I strongly agree that we should encourage more

people

to take part in vocational training for skilled

workers

as electricians or plumbers … There are several reasons why more

people

should be encouraged to enrol in vocational training.

Firstly

, tradesman plays a very important role in maintaining social activities. We need skilled

workers

in all areas of human being activities.

For instance

, when a building is constructed, we need

workers

to build it up. And, to ensure the safety of use of buildings

such

as hospitals, museums, schools, roads, we

also

need them for maintenance.

Secondly

, when most

people

choose to study at

university

, it causes an imbalance of labour demand which leads to the unemployment of

university

graduates but lack of

people

to do manual works. More

people

must be encouraged to attend vocational training courses. The onus is on schools to incorporate relevant subjects into the curriculum

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so that not all the emphasis is placed on preparation for academic study at

university

. Many boys and girls are not academically inclined, but

this

doesn't mean that school should consider them as failures.

For example

, workshops in schools could provide an opportunity to learn " hands-on skills", adapting the theory of the physics lessons to practical applications. Parents should

also

help children to choose vocational careers, explaining the good employment prospects and remuneration for manual

workers

with qualifications and skills. In conclusion, while studying at

university

is a good option for most young

people

, I still agree that we should encourage more

people

to go for vocational training for skilled

workers

in order to ensure the balance of employment in society.

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Many people go to university for acadamic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualifed workers such as electricians and plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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