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People say that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Currently, studying abroad has never failed to provoke debates. It is argued that scholars learning abroad could bring a wealth of tremendous benefits for the mother nation. While
this
 thinking is valid to some extent, I consider myself a partial advocate of
this
 perspective. Overseas students have foreign language proficiency and a set of skills acquired in developed nations may become
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 human resources for the advancement of their country. Specifically, they have a firm grasp in a flood of aspects
such
 as Marketing or business administration so they can impulse international business and partnerships.
Moreover
, international students have had the opportunity to experience and adapt to cultural diversity across different
countries
.
As a result
, they can shape a culturally inclusive society in their nations with a view not to be left behind. While the redeeming features of study in foreign
countries
 are widely acknowledged, its counterpart still lingers. Specifically, many international students who go to other
countries
 for educational purposes may decide to settle as a resident because of the progressive living conditions of those
countries
.
For example
, because the USA has better living standards and career development opportunities than Vietnam, the scholars studying there may make up their minds to dwell there
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after study.
This
 trend represents a significant loss for the economic development of their home
countries
 since the well-trained workers use their skills and knowledge to benefit other nations.
Consequently
, these are called brain drain and would have a serious impact on their country’s workforce. In conclusion,
although
 the development of study abroad can have a great impact on the home country, the government should find viable solutions in order to curb the brain drain problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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