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People should be allowed to continue to work for as long as they want to, and not be forced to retire at a particular age such as 60 or 65. Do you agree or disagree?

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As there's debut ongoing about people should be allowed to do
work
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 as long as they want to do and do not forced them to retire at a decided
age
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 like as 60 or more than that. I totally agree with
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 statement because if they retire at a government decided
age
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 that will help younger generations to get that places which may be more productive and one thing is maybe younger ones will study more and do hard
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 to be in that position.
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 with, our government made a rule long ago that after a particular
age
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 people should retire and
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 a good thing not just it will help them to get free from burden but that will make changes for the younger generation. like , if adults get more chances to be in that place they will give us more productive
work
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 than they did at their ages and that matter the most nowadays.
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, like working in government Clark one should do more visit to their main office rather than to set in a particular office and after some ,ages it will body will make them weak and
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 for them it becomes impossible which eventually called as less productive
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.
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, If their retirement is fixed
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 people who are preparing themselves even get more motivated to get into the positions and
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 thing directly let them do more hard
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 that increases our literacy rate. So indirectly it is better to have limited
age
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 criteria and that will increase the hope of the person who working harder to see him or her in that position.
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, like in ,India there's a requirement ongoing for the post of PSI and younger candidates working so hard to see themselves to be in that place is all because after
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 many persons were retired and that positions are free. ,
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 particular retirement
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 helps younger ones to settle. To sum up, everything is happening for a reason and retirement at a particular
age
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 will always be helpful for their future because they will get time to know more about their loved ones. And
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 a particular
age
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 makes more opportunities.
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