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Children should never be educated at home by their parents. Discuss.

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Today we live in a fast-paced world, everything evolves at a frantic pace so it causes a competitive education system that everyone demands an appropriate tutorial for their
children
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. But some people believe that the mainstream education system can’t provide an excellent environment for their
children
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. Governments all around the world have different perspectives about homeschooling ,,
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 most of them accept it as a legal act. Some of them even consider a special concession for families to teach their
children
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 at home. There are some advantages to homeschooling, students have a flexible study curriculum. They decide what to learn and when to study the courses another benefit is they get more attention from their father and mother
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, they have more self-esteem and they will learn better in a natural place like home
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 in the new studies indicate, homeschooling ,
children
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 get a better score than regular pupils in regular schools. On the other ,hand critics claim that homeschooling has some negative effects on our
children
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 social behaviour. They need to interact with their peers to learn about teamwork and how to negotiate with others. We should prepare them as a productive workforce for the future
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, they need to participate in physical activities to maintain their health and more important to teach them how to plan a strategy to win the game as a crow. In conclusion, the hassles of homeschooling outweigh the advantages ,,
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 on some ,occasions we need to provide equipment and support the families who want to teach their
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 by themselves. We can allow them to join some of the classes or participate in sports activities
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 as football and basketball to improve their social skills.
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