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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

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There has no doubt been a drastic increase in the number of voyagers in recent decades.
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 growth as well as its advantages for viators.
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's interest in voyages is the rapid development of the aviation industry and the extension of a network of airports around the world. In consequence, it has made possible the emergence of massive, fast and relatively cheap flights. As an example of a cardinal shift in speed, it can be cited the following comparison: the average pace of
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 on horseback a hundred years ago was about 50 km per day, today the plane flies have 700 km per hour.
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 have appreciated
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 cheap, convenient and fast way to
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 long distances. Travels contain an inexhaustible source of advantages, and in the
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 place is the cross-cultural exchange. It contributes to international connections which can bring promote cultural collaborations in the long term. It
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 promotes cross-cultural awareness for both locals and tourists and builds bridges of understanding between cultures. It can be quoted the words of Mark Twain said that
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 is destructive for prejudice, fanaticism and narrow-mindedness and it is impossible to gain broad, healthy and merciful views on
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 and things, staying in the same place all one's lifetime. To conclude, affordable air
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 offers unprecedented freedom of movement, vastly increasing the number of voyagers.
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 have the opportunity to be acquainted with unfamiliar traditions and views and gain a broader, more informed and benevolent view of both the
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 and places they encounter as well as of humanity and the world in general.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economy pricing
  • Cultural exchange
  • International business
  • Heritage sites
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Global citizen
  • Study abroad
  • Standard of living
  • Destination
  • Itinerary
  • Online bookings
  • Digital nomad
  • Bucket list
  • Sustainable travel
  • Eco-tourism
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