International sporting events could contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world. Do you agree or disagree? Support your opinion with relevant examples

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It is common that the global
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in different kinds of sport could be a magnificent factor, which
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to spread peace and development. I
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what is the outcome of increasing the number of these
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in the world. Enlargement the number of global sporting
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in different countries could be
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positively on the economy.
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, tourism could be increased which will lead to more in
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of
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the country.
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, sport becomes one of the most essential
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of revenue
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many
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countries
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country
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as Brazil.
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, sporting
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could be a paramount reason
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spreading peace between nations. To illustrate,
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the sport
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itself called upon tolerance which means acceptance of whenever you win or lose.
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means the ability
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tolerent
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tolerant
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the peace of countries.
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, being acquainted with different cultures will absolutely
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in
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everyone's horizons. In conclusion, whenever more global sporting
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took place that would be a
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important thing with many positives aspects on the individuals and on the countries itself. I hope in the future that
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events
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