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‘Failure is proof that desire wasn’t strong enough’ To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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People
 have a perception that
failure
 means they are not having the determination and dedication to the work they are performing.
This
 essay is aimed to deny
this
 viewpoint and show many other reasons due to which
such
 can happen. To start with, the main point, why
people
 have
failure
 is that they do not trust themselves that their aim can be reached, and
people
 before even trying quit.
For instance
, if the individual fails once at some point he starts to believe that it is impossible to achieve it and just gives up.
However
, failures are the best experiences that
people
 should use in their lives. Most successful
people
 are not talented, but they all have the pace of doing something and working with their experience.
Consequently
, a lack of self-confidence to achieve goals always lead to an unsuccessful situation ,not a
success
. The lack of confidence is not the only thing that determines
people
 from
success
,
then
 another one is
discipline
. The
last
 but not least point that should be highlighted is
discipline
.
People
 are talking about
discipline
 as one of the most important elements of
success
 for a long time,
however
,
people
 often do not pay enough attention to it and have troubles.
For example
,
people
 with no self-control, sacrifice, and avoiding distractions and temptations can never be stayed focused on their goals. What is more, following the
discipline
 lets
people
 be confident that they will never miss deadlines or somehow had less preparation than is required. In conclusion,
failure
 can happen due to any reason, at any stage of life.
Additionally
, it depends on a person who receives the experience of fails. Indeed,
failure
 means a stepping stone to
success
 and by constant motivation and learning , a process they can attain
success
.
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