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Divorce rates and family breakdowns are increasing globally, it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, judicial separation of family members
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 relatively higher than before, due to difficulties in communication and lack of closeness
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between them. The problems and
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 for
this
 will be illustrated in the succeeding divisions.
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 a general note, judicial separation of family occurs due to lack of communication and
also
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,
lengthy
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 working hours in an office, there is no time to communicate with their
life
 partners. Gap has been built in between them and bonding has been reduced. In
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 olden
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 they used to go and watch movies once or twice
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a month. But now there is no time to spend with their
life
 partners, because of the hectic schedule in their robotic
life
. By observing the above causes, they intend to
breakdown
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 their relationship. On the other
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, breaking down their relationship is not only the solution. The problem which is stated in
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 section can be
resloved
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resolved
 by buying time for each other with the adjustment of their schedule.
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, if there is a communication between them, the bond which is missing can be built. In most scenario's, love between two person's happens through hard
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 and by understanding each other feelings.
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,
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couples can lead
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happy
life
 without any
controversials
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controversial
controversies
 in
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 future. To conclude, judicial separation is not only a solution for issues in
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marriage
life
, there are few solutions to lead a happy
life
 without any problems as mentioned in the above paragraph's.
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