Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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argue that
people
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should pay more money on buying sugary
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in order to reduce the
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problems caused by
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. Personally, I disagree with the idea to increase the
price
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of sugary
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, because I believe that there is a more advisable way to reach that. For a variety of reasons, it would be wrong to raise the
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of
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with a high level of
sugar
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.
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cannot forbid
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from eating
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.
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, they can add more
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to their homemade food, leading to the same consequences that they still intake too much
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.
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, it is unequal to the manufacturers whose major in producing sugary food, because the high
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of their
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may reduce their sales which result in a declining financial trend.
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, buying expensive
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are regarded as a sign of high financial status by some
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nowadays, so it is possible that it may attract more
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to purchase it. In my opinion, it is more vital for the government to raise citizens‘ awareness of
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-caused
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problems. The
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problems caused by
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are still not recognised by the majority of
people
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, which contribute to the constant intake of
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products
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. So the essential measure we should take to make
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consume less
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is to deepen their understanding of
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effects,
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, we can set courses about
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issues in the
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and secondary school that children sometimes ingest more
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than adults, as well as the universities, some companies and in hospitals. The government can
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establish laws to enforce manufacturers to print the disadvantages of
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in their
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' packages to warn
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who intend to eat
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. In conclusion, I believe it is more important to raise individual awareness of
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-caused
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issues
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of setting a higher
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for sugary
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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