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Some school leavers go travelling or work for a period of time instead of going directly to University. do you think this has more advantage or disadvantage for their study ?

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we are living in the modern era of pressure . the entire world has running for success. a lot of younger want to let's get success quickly
however
, they don'
t
 know how will start ?
first
 I would like to explicate it at length in the paragraph to come. to commence with, travelling is the best way to do for making decisions and
also
 stress buster. why students are
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 travel ? The cause is
study
 pressure on students by parents and they are confused about what
study
 suitable for us. who best way for success.
moreover
, youngers thinking can'
t
 match with elders. majority of learners, financial conditions were not good so they decided to leave the higher
study
 and do work. as soon as, they decided what to do
further
, they do
further
 higher
study
. In case, students travel after completing their secondary studies
then
, they lose concentration not only
study
 but
also
 face a problem in higher studies. they can face several types of difficulties like do can'
t
 make decisions, stress on the mind, the age gap.
furthermore
, they can'
t
 able to doing professional work because they can'
t
 talk with higher education studies. conclusion, travelling is the best way to decide moving decision until mind never relax on under pressure by family. they can'
t
 make decisions.
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