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Public places are noisy. What are the causes of this and what do you think should be done about it?

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 other and they don'
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the rules. Public
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 are noisy
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 of causes
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 the shops in nearby public places example you take any bus stop in my country you look around you sawing many shops about
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 are buying anything they more
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create
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breaks
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 the rule .
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 should be ban contrasting nearby general areas because
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venue
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government
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the government
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 only prefer to little bit foods shops.and don'
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 allow photographers or phone use public venues because now time adults are more prefer to phone.
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 you visit the public parks we are looking
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 than adults only come in
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take
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 pictures.
Folks
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 prefer to use
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their phone
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phone
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phones
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 in public places. In my conclusion as well as
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 gentleman more prefer to follow the rules about anything.
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