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Countries are planning for the future and the best way is to invest resources on the young population. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable, That a popular Stratum Of the society tend to believe that families have a great influence on children’s lives,
however
, other people say that external influence plays a vital role in
child’s
life
 I disagree with
this
 notion I would like to explicate it at length in the paragraph to come Commencing with, the most prominent reason,
parents
 behaviour play a crucial role in their
child’s
life
firstly
, and ancestors are the
first
 teacher of their child. Young ones learn mostly everything from their
parents
.
Furthermore
, child behaviour always reflects that of their
parents
. If the child sees their
parents
 always argue and fight with others he or she may pick the same thing and become violent.
For instance
, they may start to bully overweight kids at school,
also
 they will not care about others emotions.
Thus
,
This
 can lead them towards negative development. Shifting towards the
second
 school of thought, children can choose any path they want to take in their
life
 ,
however
, it depends on the family whether they support their
child’s
 dream or not
moreover
,
this
 is because even though teachers and friends can support children mentally,
however
,
parents
 are the only ones from whom they get financial help. To indicate if a youngster wants to become a musician and if there and Ancestors do not believe in their dreams and refused to buy instruments for them, they would not even be able to get started. In conclusion
although
, families have a bigger impact on their
child’s
life
 in my opinion
child’s
 Behaviour Mirror that of their
parents
 whether it is good or bad
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