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Some people believe that wild animals should not be kept in zoos or other man-made environments as there is no longer a need for them in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

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A certain number of the public think that forest
animals
 must live in the natural environment
instead
 of
constrained
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 in a cage at
this
 decade.I strongly agree with
this
 statement and will discuss
as
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 detailed in the following paragraphs.
First
 and foremost,everyone wants to live without any hesitation in
this
 world
therefore
,flora has the same right to spend their
life
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 in natural habitat.
Moreover
,it's a cruel activity to catch the beasts from the jungle and put
in
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them in
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a
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 iron cage.
For instance
,in Thailand,one of the parks was handling constrained
animals
very
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 careless conditions and
this
 news
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spread
spreaded
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spread
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 on youtube and got viral whereas,the government initiated to close the park and released them
in to
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 the forest area.
Secondly
,they may get limited
foods
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food
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 rather than their own places since the artificial park management may don't have enough
fund
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funds
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 to buy the foods which required
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the asper
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asper
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as per
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 size of the
animals
 and birds.Most of
this
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these
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 created places
not
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do not
did not
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 give any good atmosphere in any manner to
the
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these things because of the lack of lands and huge investment required to build a world for them.
On the other hand
,Even though,it is good to conserve a place for the maneater beasts without allow to live in
forest
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the forest
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.In the current scenario,several areas have been
destryoing
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destroying
 due to the unexpected fire and other related issues and it may cause the
animals
come
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 to the village for
foods
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food
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.For
expample
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example
,In Kerala have reported many incidents for the
last
 6 months about
the
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man hunters
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manhunters
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 and deprived the cultivation by the
animals
.
Increaing
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Increasing
 these cases
beacause
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because
 of the plot extent
decresing
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decreasing
decreeing
an
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year by year. In conclusion,a number of agreed points and disagreed points on
this
 topic but the agreed notes surpass the disagreed,The government must take
a
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proper action against
to
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these dealers and give
freedom
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them freedom
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 to live for the creatures in their uninhabited places.
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