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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#students #study #history #literature #science #mathematics #support
To some, learning history and literature is more critical than learning
science
 and
mathematics
 while
,
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others think that exactly the vice versa. I disagree with both
approximation
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 and to my point of view both of the
fields
 have equal importance since the integration of these
fields
 brings out of the technological and cultural development.
Expertising
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Expertise
 in
mathematics
 and
science
 help students to choose engineering, medicine and other scientific
fields
 as their jobs.
Besides
this
,
to study
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 in these areas, improve people's analytical abilities. So, students who have
mathematics
 and
science
 lessons intensely will have better cognition ability and
therefore
 they may have the option to be a lawyer. In
this
 point, the subject that we mentioned come closer to human sociality than the machines and become a bridge between alphabetical and numerical sciences.
Thus
, all the knowledge in these supports cultural wealthiness. there
is
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 two contrasting approaches whether to study history and literature is important or to study
science
 and
mathematics
. In my opinion, these
fields
 should be the same cardinality since only with the combination of these components spring out value.
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