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Some people think that schools should select their pupils according to their academic ability. Others believe that young people with different abilities should be educated together. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #schools #pupils #ability #abilities
Some
people
 believe that
schools
 should accept students based on their academic ability, while others argue that children should
study
 together no matter what they have
different
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a different
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level
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levels
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 of
abilities
. In
this
 essay,
both
 of
these viewpoint
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this viewpoint
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 will be discussed before reaching a conclusion. On the
on
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one
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 hand, encouraging smart students to
study
 together will
stregthen
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strengthen
 their
abilities
. When
schools
 are
fulled
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with
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of
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 excellent
pupils
, it will impact
schools
' ranking positively. Based on
such
 ranking,
schools
 can draw attention from societies for funding their
schools
.
Moreover
, as all
pupils
 have
similar
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 knowledge
level
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levels
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, teachers can teach
advance
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 subjects for
pupils
.
For example
, Triudomsuksa school, a leading high school in Thailand, is well-known in terms of getting into the
schools
.
This
 school is competitive, but all students perform well in academic
both
local
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the local
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 and international
level
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levels
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.
That is
 the result of all
pupils
study
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 hard.
Therefore
, I think if
schools
 aim at enhancing only academic
abilities
, selecting
pupils
 based on their academic knowledge is the best suit for
schools
.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that there are different
abilities
 among young
people
 and they should learn together. One of the positive
side
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 is that they will understand the
real world
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 situation that
people
 are different. They should learn to live
other
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with other
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people
 who may not
as
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be as
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 smart as them. Another reason is that some children are not good at
academic
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academics
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, but they are good at art, sport, dancing, etc. When they educate together, they can learn from each other. On top of that, it is vital to develop their skills
both
 academic and
creativity
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. In my point of view, I strongly believe that young
people
 will get more benefit from knowing and learning from different types of
student
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students
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. In conclusion,
both
 of these viewpoints have their pros and cons.
Nevertheless
, it depends on societies and parents to choose which side is the best option for children. In my opinion, as I believe in diversity, I support the latter view that different
abilities
 should
study
 together.
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