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You have recently started a new job. Write a letter to your friend to tell her about it and invite for an evening meal. - Describe how you feel about the job. - Give directions to a meeting place. - Give suggestions on where to stay, if she is coming from a different city

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Dear Sam, I am very pleased to inform you that I am getting a new role as an Admin Officer in the Microsoft Office Company and I wanted to share my happiness with you, as, you are my best friend. The best advantage of working with Microsoft Company is a reasonable salary with health benefits for a lifetime. It will give experience in an Admin Office
along with
 certification in Microsoft 365.
After
this
 great news, I was looking forward to meeting you, so, we can enjoy lunch together in our
favorite
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 restaurant. We can meet in the city of Toronto and will see together for
further
 planning. If you are coming from a different city, you can text me the location, I will give you the guidelines for the bus or taxi. Hope to see you soon. Your Friend XYZ
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You have provided a complete response, but you could include a bit more detail about your feelings regarding the job.
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Make sure to give specific and clear directions to the meeting place, as the current description is a bit vague.
coherence cohesion
Adding transitions between your ideas can improve the logical structure of your paragraphs.
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Your tone is friendly and inviting, which suits the context of writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
You've clearly greeted and closed your letter, showing good organization.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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