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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

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people
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 would agree that in
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 contemporary era we have absolute freedom to choose, especially as the world evolves so rapidly with advanced technologies. I feel that automatized machines make lives easier, and at the same
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people
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 become addicted to
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. My personal view will be provided in
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 to live in the past. Admittedly, antecedent occasions give valuable lessons to present society, and by looking back
people
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 enjoys
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 of having clear water every season and by one touch of
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 tap.
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,
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 till 2000 in Kazakhstan did not
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now
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 anything about pampers
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 and were using old methods, but now
life
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the life
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 mom is simplified day by day.
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, for most of the
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time
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 for them, whereas
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 from
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future
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 would say that our decade was truly hard to live. In my personal view, today is better than yesterday, but
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future
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 is better than today.
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, fascinating
time
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 to live is now, because
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the human
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 being has
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ability
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 to use all privileges, we can read any books at any
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, we can go toilet and take shower anytime, all children have
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ability
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 to be educated. Centuries ago,
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wealthy
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 population had
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ability
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 to read and write, be educated and have
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ability
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 to go to schools. I am
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 of modern civilization, and I cannot imagine a world without electricity, antibiotics and washing machines. It is logical to conclude that, our era is the best in comparison with the past, but
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future
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the future
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 would be brighter than now. Tremendous opportunities
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, and
vast
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 majority of
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 contributes
in
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it
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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